brad posted a comment on Friday 26th August 2011 1:09am

Your 'mature' stories have always been perched on the edge of my HP fanfic comfort zone as I'm not too interested in the smut/innuendo side of things. Luckily for me I'm finding 'A Boon for Bill' as having some good stuff outside of that category, although some chapters - like this one - make me a bit nervous. A whole lot of attention on the forbidden zones. But that's cleverly done, too, which makes it all quite entertaining.

I'm a staunch H/Hr man so that aspect of your story has me firmly on-board, even if I'm more the fluffy sort. Aside from that I'm finding myself more interested in other facets of your plot which I hope are coming up ... like what will happen when Molly first catches one of our heroes with her love potion. I'm quite looking forward to how you're going to have Harry or Hermione respond, how you'll write it. Will the subject be totally unaware as he/she suddenly lusts for for a redhead? Will his/her familiar pick up on the new vibes, or react badly to them? (I'm thinking of Crookshanks - as you may recall I really enjoyed your slant on Hermione and her familiar in the opening chapters of this story, just the idea of her being a normal, emotional girl letting her hair down with her familiar - suddenly hissing and spitting with hair electrified when her mistress does an about-face, for example.) Will the other be - inside - secretly disappointed that the target succumbed? Maybe until he/she, also, is dealt a dose? Also the whole Bill-liegeman thing and releasing Fleur.

Anyway, there were some nice non-sex parts to this chapter, too, for stodgy types like me who get a bit weary of all the different ways to focus on a lady's 'bits'. I liked Harry's 'nobility', the different coloured ticks and so forth (I'd thought he'd resisted Fleur's allure there at the end, but it was pointed out that he'd been out of range). Fleur's magical beach kit was a nifty bit of creativity - the yellow 'purifier' duck particularly tickled my fancy.

And I had me my fluffy H/Hr scene where "Harry and Hermione realised their love for each other and rushed into each other's arms", anyway, so I'm certainly not complaining. I'm pleased you gave them/us that emotional connection. SO much better than a completely mindless canon clinch!

I dare say - given their ages - they *are* teenagers - a Harry and Hermione playing around with their feelings and physical attraction for each other as a precursor to going deeper is more realistic, at that, than a kids-rated version. Anyway, I'm enjoying your story, thank you for continuing with it!

canoncansodoff replied:

Thanks for the review.

I admit that I like to dance close to the line that divides "delightfully naughty" stories from those that are raunchy and sophomoric, and I acknowledge that the last chapter did some tightrope walking on that line. I know that it's not everyone's cup of tea (just as I know that other readers are gushing with encouragement). Glad that you've found other things to enjoy in the story, and i can guarantee that the next chapter or three will dance farther back from that line.

I hope that you aren't disappointed if the conflict that you are anticipating with relish doesn't materialize (at least how you envision it). Please recall that there is no evidence that love potions have been applied, and only strong circumstantial evidence that Amortentia was brewed. Neutralizing agents are being taken proactively, so the couples might not even know if she tries (unless Molly reacts badly to the lack of results). Good point about the familiars, though...they might see greater screen time in future updates.

gadriam posted a comment on Thursday 25th August 2011 5:10pm

Very nice. The girls' banter and overall relationship is a lot of fun to read, and the link between the mages and their familiars is intriguing. The insta-beach-magic was completely awesome and i just love that duck. Those dresses and glasses were a nice device but that praetego-charm had me howling. Very suitable for Magical Britain. One thing that bothers me though is how easily Harry agrees to the Darth Molly rule. Sure, he's splitting his thinking between two heads, but i still believe he should be plotting escape in a hurry. Perhaps finance a larger flat for his liegeman, ward the hell out of it and just move. The biggest obstacle is Molly, but Harry has the option of open rebellion. He dislikes the matchmaking, he has outgrown Ron by about a decade and Ginny is so annoying he can barely stand her. He would lose close contact with Arthur by ditching the Burrow, but that's it. Hmm. Arthur - naked Hermione... Tough call, right? On the other hand, without problems there's no story.

May Robert Lind in Kramfors bless your keyboard.

g

canoncansodoff replied:

Harry has been acclimatized to Molly's reign over the past couple of summers, and has only been there a week. He is finding ways to subversively operate under her nose, and so maybe it's better the devil you know. At least until his birthday when he can assume more control as Bill's emancipated liege lord.

Recall that I've also given a reason for Hermione to stay at the Burrow...she needs to do magic daily as part of her restorative therapy sessions, and couldn't do that at home. And where Hermione is, Harry is going to want to be.

Feno3000 posted a comment on Thursday 25th August 2011 4:28pm

Sweet new Update. Just on the borderline of "too" racy, but funny enough to not matter. Especially liked the moment when Pig was mentioned :p The images "at the beach" on the other hand... well i guess an author has to have fun while messing with the heads of his readers sometimes too.

Eric_S posted a comment on Thursday 25th August 2011 3:17pm

Really enjoying this AU version of 5th year summer and comedy/cluelessness of the Weasley's. Loving the sexual inuendo between Hermione and Fleur (not to mention Harry) during there their summer stay. And the catalouges... BRILLIANT!
Thanks for a great read.

QOShea posted a comment on Sunday 10th July 2011 4:28am

Pygmy Puffs are actually Tribbles.

normalguycap posted a comment on Monday 4th July 2011 12:09pm

Molly needs to be slapped into her place.

bannanacupcakes posted a comment on Saturday 2nd July 2011 4:29pm

please update soon :)

lwj2 posted a comment on Friday 1st July 2011 9:55am

Neat story, I'm enjoying it. Thanks! ô ¿Ã´

Zamia posted a comment on Friday 1st July 2011 4:19am

Molly is still a PITA. Impressed by the whole idea of the catalog. Now if you could find me Jane Russell's catalog from the 50's, I would be very greatful. Good read. Cheers. Z

Pointer posted a comment on Thursday 30th June 2011 4:58pm

Very nice chapter.
The catalog idea was intriguing.
I do wonder about the tribbles. Obviously not the same breeding method as in Star Trek...or maybe the twins actually DID follow instructions?? Nah.
Enjoyed it.

Zucht posted a comment on Thursday 30th June 2011 3:15pm

Definately HOT! also with a plot. I like the plotting and counter-plotting; this is an interesting read.

Wolfric posted a comment on Thursday 30th June 2011 2:37pm

Good chapter. Thanks for writing. W.

Chris1 posted a comment on Thursday 30th June 2011 6:39am

I keep waiting for the moment when Harry and Hermione or bill and fleur, while snogging or in the middle of something passionate, react to Molly interrupting with a stunner or something of the sort, then go back to more pleasurable activities :D

Cassandra30 posted a comment on Monday 6th June 2011 10:07pm

Good chapter. I would imagine Fred and George will be appalled at the Amortentia.

Cassandra30 posted a comment on Monday 6th June 2011 8:51pm

Excellent! I like it!

Crys posted a comment on Monday 21st March 2011 10:02am

yeah, definitely deserves its "Adult-only" rating.

Like how you're threading parts of canon into this. Somewhere between poking fun and pointing at plot holes. Merlin knows we've all done it and thoroughly enjoy reading it.

Looking forward to more.

Connielam posted a comment on Tuesday 15th March 2011 8:47pm

Oh this is just hysterically funny, thanks for a great read. I can't wait for more!

GremlinXTJ posted a comment on Monday 14th March 2011 7:32am

Heh - chicken choking huh? I read in a story about a condom that changed to a rubber chicken (one of Bobmins I think) but yeah, I can see the twins doing this version too. But GAAAAH! do you need to keep bringing back the visuals of Molly? :D

Quincy posted a comment on Thursday 3rd March 2011 1:13am

Alright, so I figure it's worth mentioning that've read every thing you've posted here and a few elsewhere. I enjoyed every minute of it. Thanks for taking the time to write it.
Also The Sweat of a Gladiator doesn't have any words here. Though I could understand why you might change your mind about posting it.

Entilzah posted a comment on Monday 28th February 2011 12:50pm

So good to see you on this site! Well deserved.

And I am not sure how out-of-touch I am with the current publishing schedule on your various sites, but it is definitely good to see this "new" story out. As always, I heartily enjoy the banter you develop between all your characters, especially Harry and Hermione.